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Title: The Smiling Merman
Chapter: 3. Stand Up and Walk
Author: [livejournal.com profile] a1y_puff
Pairing: TezuFuji of course, and… (Censored) x An
Genre: parody/romance
Rating: PG-13 I think ^^;;;
Story Summary: a parody of the little mermaid. Fuji was a merman who found interest to a certain stoic Prince named Tezuka xD
Chapter Summary: Fuji finally made it to the land. He finally met the human being he was interested in. the man invited him in, but although Fuji already had his legs, he couldn’t walk?
Warning: Shonen Ai, AU! And maybe… some OOC-ness for the sake of the story xD
Disclaimer: PoT and its characters aren’t mine, neither “The Little Mermaid”. I’m so sad >.<

A/N: Hey guys, I’m back with chapter 3!! Tezuka and Fuji is going to meet here, hurrah!! XD
But before that, I’d like to thank everyone who had commented on the prev chaps! I got quite a lot, thanks!
I’m happy I got more reviews in chapter 2. I hope I’ll get even more reviews for this chapter XD
And for anyone who have been silent readers, please leave your reviews too if you like this, ne? It’ll make me happy and will most likely speed me up in writing chapters XD

Oh, much MUCH thanks to [livejournal.com profile] moehoshi for all the corrections and suggestions! *glomps*

Anyway, notes:
1. words inside 'this' are writings/notes
2 Words inside 'this and in italics' are thoughts or the likes

Previous Chapters HERE
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-Chapter 3-
STAND UP AND WALK




Fuji saw black. Or rather, he couldn’t see anything. Was he dreaming? But he didn’t remember going to sleep. He tried to remember something… anything, to explain his current condition. He then remembered visiting Inui…

Oh right, Inui’s potion… he drank it. And then what happened? Oh, his throat was burning and he couldn’t breathe. He then felt a very painful sensation and then…

Everything was black.

Wait, he wasn’t like… dead, was he? Because if yes, he was going to haunt Inui for life!

‘…hey…’

He heard a voice. It sounded so far away. He had heard that voice before. But where?

‘… you…’

He couldn’t really hear what the voice was trying to say.

“Hey, wake up!”

Fuji’s eyes snapped open. He felt dizzy as he tried to get up to a sitting position… wait, sitting position?

Fuji immediately turned his head to see his tail… oh WOW! It had turned to a pair of beautiful legs! The potion really worked.

“Hey, are you okay?” asked a deep and cold voice. Fuji turned his head and saw a familiar face.

It was that man. The man he had rescued a week ago from drowning. The man with soft, beautiful dark brown hair, and beautiful hazel eyes… hey wait, he wore glasses? He didn’t wear any glasses before. Oh, wait. It must have fallen off to the ocean when he drowned.

“You are not answering. Are you okay?” he asked again. Fuji couldn’t tell if his tone was worried or annoyed.

Fuji opened his mouth, ready to answer, but no words came out.

Oh right… he had lost his voice.

Fuji brought his forefinger to the sands and wrote ‘I am fine’ in human’s alphabet. Now, he was grateful they taught human’s alphabet at school.

Fuji looked up to face the man — whom he had already known the name; Tezuka Kunimitsu – and smiled at him.

Tezuka frowned. He looked at Fuji’s face, then to the writing on the sand. “Are you mute?” he asked again.

Fuji’s smile faltered a bit as he wrote ‘yes’. Just a few hours ago, he still had his rather feminine voice, but now he had lost it.

“I see,” Tezuka said. His tone sounded a little concerned, if Fuji was not mistaken.

Tezuka took a good look at the stranger in front of his eyes. When he first saw him lying unconscious on the sand, he almost thought he was a she for his face and slender body showed feminine features. But soon, he found out that he was actually a male.

Now that reminded him of something. He took off his mantle and gave it to Fuji. “Here. Put it on,” he offered—no, commanded might be the word.

Fuji looked confused at first and then he realized that he was naked. Well, he had been naked since he was born as a merman and mermen didn’t have that… that…thing between his legs now. What was that again? He remembered reading about that in a book of human’s anatomy, but he didn’t remember the name. Fuji figured out that it must be something that you should cover, since he noticed Tezuka was trying to look everywhere but there. He looked rather uneasy too.

Fuji smiled once again and mouthed a voiceless ‘thank you’ as he accepted Tezuka’s mantle and wrapped his body with it.

“Where are you from?” Tezuka asked again, once Fuji had something to cover his body with.

Fuji was doubtful for a moment. How should he answer the question? He just wrote ‘from far, far away’. He wasn’t lying, was he? It was true that he came from far, far away, deep under the sea.

“How did you get here, and why were you naked? Were you robbed or something?” Tezuka asked again. He felt that he had talked way too much than his usual self, but that’s the least he could do to make a conversation with a mute man.

Fuji didn’t answer this. He merely smiled. He opened his eyes, though, and sent a message to Tezuka’s eyes that he wasn’t going to answer that. Tezuka somehow caught the message and decided not to pry any further.

“Fine, then. Now, do you have anywhere to go?” he asked.

Fuji smiled again. His heart was saying ‘I’m here to meet you’, but his head told him that it would be wise not to say so. So, he merely shook his head.

For a moment, Tezuka was deep in thought. Now, he had no choice but to take this man home with him. It was almost like he was about to pick up an abandoned puppy or something.

“Fine. Come with me,” Tezuka stood up, turned around and gave Fuji a silent command to follow him.

Fuji was trying to stand up, but hell, he never had legs before. He fell immediately as he stood up.

As he heard a soft thud behind him, Tezuka turned his head and saw Fuji on his knees.

Okay, first try never best, Fuji thought as he once again tried to stand up and… he did! Now, he just needed to walk. Fuji was about to move his left leg when he suddenly froze. 'Err, how do you walk again?' he asked himself.

If any of his merfolk friends were there, they would consider the frown on Fuji’s face a rare sight. Fuji was always smiling, after all.

He tried to move his left foot at last, but as soon as it left the ground, he lost his balance and fell down, again.

‘This is really annoying. Damn, I should’ve learned how to walk first… or at least read some books on how you do it,’ Fuji mused inwardly.

“You can’t walk?” Tezuka asked almost in annoyance, perhaps.

Fuji slowly raised his head to face Tezuka, shook his head and smiled apologetically.

“Are your legs injured?” Tezuka asked.

‘No, I just haven’t learned how to walk,’ Fuji answered in his mind. But it would sound weird if he said that, so he merely nodded.

Tezuka sighed before he finally walked towards Fuji, picked him up, and carried him, bridal-style.

Fuji was surprised for a moment. In his normal state, he didn’t think he would appreciate this kind of… kindness? He got his pride as a man and he didn’t like it to be treated like a weakling, but well, he was not in his normal state. He needed help since he couldn’t walk on his own.

So just this time, he would let himself being helped… by this man, only.


-x-X-x-



Fuji found himself in a big bedroom, dressed in something similar to what Tezuka wore. A set of clothes that only nobles wore. He finally wore some clothes after being forced into a bath—Tezuka had dropped him in the bathroom and had his maids to, well, bathe Fuji, which the maids seemed to accept the task VERY gleefully.

Now, what should he do? He didn’t have any plan at all. He didn’t plan to turn into human and go meet his prince charming—wait, scratch that. Well, to meet the human-being he had been interested in. He had been interested in humans since he was a child after all, so it was just a mere curiosity… or so he thought.

Now that he remembered it, he didn’t say a word to his family. Will they be angry that he had gone to the land? Inui should have informed them by now, though.

Since he had nothing better to do, he decided that he should first learn how to walk. He stood up and put his left hand on the wall as a support. He tried to lift his left foot off the ground. Slowly, slowly…

And he fell.

Damn the land and its gravity. Damn balance. Water was much more convenient for him. But hell, he was a tensai! He should be able to do it soon, right?

As he stood up, the door clicked open. Tezuka was there, standing and (maybe) looking worried. Fuji assumed that he might be worried from the slight frown on his brows.

Tezuka was about to go and help Fuji but he raised a hand, telling him to stop. Tezuka stopped on his tracks, as he watched Fuji slowly raising to his feet and once again, trying to walk. Fuji almost fell down again, and Tezuka was ready to help him, but Fuji refused once more.

Tezuka stood still in front of the door. He was eyeing Fuji as the lithe boy was trying to walk again. Fuji put his left hand on the wall for support as he slowly lifted his left foot off the ground. He almost lost his balance again, but he had learned how to steady himself as he made one step forward with his right foot.

Okay, he had made one step. He tried to repeat his action with the other foot, and… he did it. He was probably starting to get used to the so-called gravity and balance.

So he made another step, and another one, and another…

And he finally managed to walk to Tezuka, who had been waiting for him at the door. He was now feeling triumphant over gravity and balance. He was indeed a tensai, he thought proudly.

But as he made his last step, he fell off-balanced and almost hit the floor, had Tezuka not caught him just in time.

Fuji smiled at him as an apology. Tezuka just stared back. For a moment or two, both of them stayed still in the half-embraced position. Somehow, the contact made Fuji felt weird, as he felt Tezuka’s hand around his waist, supporting him so he wouldn’t fall.

“Enough for today,” Tezuka broke the silence. “You can try walking again later. Now, rest,” Tezuka commanded. Fuji just nodded submissively.

He was about to step away from Tezuka when he felt the latter’s strong grip on his arm. Alright, this time, he would let Tezuka help him walk to his bed and help him sit down there. Tezuka then took a notepad and a pen from the nightstand and gave them to Fuji.

“What’s your name?” he asked.

Oh right, Fuji had not introduce himself yet. Fuji smiled as he wrote his name on the notepad.

‘Fuji Shuusuke.’

Tezuka nodded as he read the name of the man he had brought home. He looked at Fuji and introduced himself. “I’m Tezuka Kunimitsu,” he said.

Fuji just nodded and smiled at him.

‘I know…’

Suddenly, there was a loud voice that seemed to be calling for Tezuka as it said, “Nyaaaaa~! Tezukaaa~! The great, great Your highneeees~ where are youuu~~?”

Fuji could see Tezuka’s brows twitched a little, before the tall boy walked to the door and let out his head so that whoever calling him could see him. “I’m here, Kikumaru. Don’t be so loud and stop calling me that.” He crossed his arms as he leaned on the doorframe.

“Unya! So there you are! But what are you doing there? Isn’t that room empty…” Kikumaru stopped on his track as he peered inside the room and found a beautiful person that he first thought was a girl, but seeing the clothes that person wore; he decided that the person was a male.

“Hoi hoi! Who’s that, nya? Your friend?” Kikumaru asked Tezuka as he waved his hand to greet the smiling boy.

“His name is Fuji Shuusuke,” Fuji nodded at the mention of his name. “He will stay here for a while,” Tezuka explained.

“Hmm… well then nice to meet you! I’m Kikumaru Eiji, but Eiji is fine!” Kikumaru said as he suddenly was in front of Fuji. “So Fuji, why are you here?”

Fuji just smiled at Kikumaru, who threw him curious glance.

“Kikumaru, he’s mute,” Tezuka said, and Fuji inwardly chuckled at the careful tone he caught at Tezuka’s voice.

“Eh? Nya, sorry, I didn’t know!” he panicked, but Fuji smiled at him, telling him it was okay.

“So why were you looking for me?” Tezuka asked Kikumaru.

The redhead promptly bounced back to Tezuka, who was still at the door and said, “Oh right! The Queen’s looking for you. She said she wanted to talk.”

“About what?”

Kikumaru grinned at this and patted Tezuka’s shoulder repeatedly. “What are you saying? It’s about your fiancée of course! She’s coming soon enough right?”

Fuji’s heart skipped a beat.


-To Be Continued-




Side Story #1: Two days before.

‘This must be a dream’ An thought as she stared at the man’s unconscious face. This was supposed to happen a week ago. She stared at the man in front of him: closed eyelids with the long lashes, and wet hair that fell on his face. Just thinking about him made her cheeks flush and she hated it. She had never been like this before.

Suddenly, the image of the man slowly dissolved as she finally regained consciousness. She slowly opened her eyelids. Her vision was blurred.

“Ooh, she’s alive!”

An promptly sat up in shock. Where was she? Who were these humans? As confused as she was, she looked down and found her tail had turned into legs. Oh right, she was on land now, to find the man that she…

“She should be mine, then!” said a voice. An was annoyed, though when she spun her head to the source of the voice, she blinked.

It was the boy she had rescued a week ago. But somehow, that boy, in his conscious state, was different from when he was unconscious. He looked a lot more like a brat.

“Hey, Akaya, haven’t you ever heard of the saying, ‘finders keepers’? I saw her first so she should be mine!” stated a sliver-haired boy.

What was that? She was going to be one of these boys’ slave?

‘No way!’

She was about to protest when she found out that she couldn’t speak. Her voice wouldn’t come out. ‘Oh right, the side-effect. Great, just great…’

“What are you saying, Niou-senpai! I’m the prince here, so it’s obvious that she will be mine!” Akaya, the boy she had saved, said with a smug face.

“You’re abusing your status as Prince, Akaya!”

“Cut it you guys, the girl’s getting confused,” a bald boy cut in, but he was being ignored.

“Forget it, Jackal. Once they start, they won’t stop,” a redhead with a gum said. “Oi, Yagyuu, what are you doing?” he asked as he saw a boy with glasses walked towards the girl.

Yagyuu, being the gentleman that he is, removed his mantle and gently drapped it around An. “What’s your name?” he asked.

Still in her incoherent state, An said nothing. Instead, she glared suspiciously at Yagyuu and clutched the mantle he gave tightly around her body.

“Don’t worry, girl, we won’t hurt you,” the redhead, named Marui, added as he stepped closer and squatted in front of An.

Jackal also decided to leave the two fighting boys alone to join Yagyuu and Marui. “Why are you here?” he asked.

An stared at the three pairs of eyes and opened her mouth to answer, only to be reminded of the fact that she no longer had a voice. She looked down, disheartened.

“Looks like she can’t talk,” Marui sighed. “Now, what are we gonna do with her?”

“Do you have a place to go?” Yagyuu asked again. An shook her head.

The three boys stared at each other, oblivious to the quarrel happening just one meter behind them.

“Hey, Yagyuu~ tell this brat to not always do as he pleases… Hey, why are you three so silent?” Niou asked as he stepped closer, followed by Akaya.

“This girl is mute and she has nowhere to go, it seems,” Jackal was the one to answer.

The five boys were silent for a moment, when suddenly, Kirihara swept the girl up and carried her on his arms.

An mouthed a ‘WHAT-ARE-YOU-DOING?!’ while trying to struggle by kicking and punching Kirihara.

“Ouch, ouch! Stop it, girl! You’re coming with me!” Kirihara snapped at her.

“Hey, Akaya, you’re not serious about making her your slave, are you? I was just kidding!” Niou said.

‘Kidding?!’ An screamed inwardly. ‘Do humans always make jokes about enslaving people?’

“Shut up! I wasn’t serious either but it’s not like she has anywhere to go. I’m taking her in!” Kirihara shouted and kept on walking while carrying the still-struggling An.

Yagyuu sighed. “We have to report this to the King and Queen,” he said, before following Kirihara with the others.

As she thought that struggling was futile, An stopped, though she was still glaring furiously at Kirihara and occasionally threw light punches to the boy’s chest.

She wondered if she had made the biggest mistake in her life by turning into a human just to meet this brat…

-end.for.now-



A/N: Chapter 3 DOWN! Yay~!! Whew, finally… I had some difficulties here, but I made it xD
Oh, and I thought it’s time to put a side story of An. So now you know, we will have KiriAn ne? XD
Anyway I’ll tell you now, we will have some genderswitches from next chappie onwards (I just have to turn some of the boys into girls, for the sake of the story, hope you’ll understand ne)

Anyway, sorry, no teaser for the next chappie this time. I haven’t written it down; the muses are still playing around in my head. I’m having a writer’s block *sobs*
It’s like, I know what will happen towards the end, but I don’t know what to write after this until the climax *is failing badly*
and I still have to study for my IELTS test next Saturday o.O (wish me luck!!!)
But I will continue this story until it’s ending, no matter what! So worry not XD

anyway, since I kinda having a writer's block, would you guys care to inspire me with something? anything like... maybe what kind of scenes u wish to see between Tezuka and Fuji or what other pairings you want?
anything?
and I have a rondom questions: IF (still 'if') I were to make Jiroh and/or Gakuto a girl, what would their names be? Their names are so boys, I can't think of any girl's version for those >.<

That’s all. Reviews would be much, MUCH loved, con-crits are welcomed and flames would be ignored! Hope you all enjoy this chappie x3

Date: 2008-03-21 01:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kairi-jaganshi.livejournal.com
Yay! :D An update~! *ish happy* I meant to comment on the second chapter, but alas, I was on vacation with my family so I couldn't read it until just now. But at least I got to read two chapters in one day. xD

...I cannot even begin to describe in words how amused I am by the Inui/Kaidoh-ness. :D Let me just say I am one happy fangirl now. ^__^ I also like how you made Fuji not being able to walk properly at first. Some writers might have made Fuji unable to walk at first, but then magically he can walk all of a sudden. But not you. :D

And OMFG Ann/Kirihara FTW. xDDDD While its not one of the crackiest pairings I've seen, it's still pretty cracky. xP Oh, and gentleman!Yagyuu PWNS. :DD

As for future pairings...I must simply demand Momo/Ryoma. *ponders* Hey...maybe Ryoma and Tezuka could be neighborhing prince cousins..? LOL Since Ryoma is the "Prince of Tennis". *snerks* As for Jiroh and Gakuto's female names...I got nothing. *fails* Sorry I can't be of more help.

Date: 2008-03-21 03:45 am (UTC)
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Yay~ good for you to be able to read 2 chapters in one day ne? ^^

hahah, thanks! I'm glad u enjoyed the little InuKai moment I slipped in ^^
and yeah, I thought as Fuji never had leg before, he wouldn't just suddenly can walk ne? even if he's a tensai, he needed to learn things too (like, learn how to walk XD;;)
I'm glad u enjoyed this ^_____^

KiriAn was a request from [livejournal.com profile] moehoshi and since she helps me a lot, I though at least I'd write KiriAn for her (And I kinda found KiriAn a cute pairing actually XD;;)
and Yagyuu i indeed a gentleman ne? *nods*

MomoRyo... I'll think about that ^^
Yah, Ryoma can be Tezuka's cousin or something ne? actually I've planned to slip in Ryoma somewhere but I haven't thought of the role ^^ thanks for the idea ^_____^
and don't be sorry! I'm happy enough you read and comment on this story :)

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Date: 2008-03-21 02:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ookami-fuu.livejournal.com
... that was totally unexpected... Akaya and Ann that is... I was kind of thinking that the other drowning prince was probabl Momo or Ryoma...

Well, anyways, great chapter! Fuji sure is a stubborn and determined one here. Just a question though, will he regain his voice back? Or will he remain mute?

Date: 2008-03-21 03:38 am (UTC)
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Hahah.. I've never thought of that either before [Unknown site tag] poked me ^^
But yeah, I think I started to like KiriAn XD

thanks! glad u liked this!
well, just like the original story, if Fuji can make Tezuka fall for him and marry him, he will get his voice back ^^
IF he did it, that is XD;;;

Date: 2008-03-21 03:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chibikaoruchan.livejournal.com
woooooooooooooooooooooooooooots~~ It's here!! ^^ You finally made it!! I will be waiting impatiently for the next chappie~~~

Also, you could make Tezuka bring Fuji on a date or somthing (like, right after he meets his fiance) ^^ and then at night, Fuji would be staring outside the window, at the sea, and wonder about his family and all. Then Tezuka would fall for his charm >=]
Or something like that. I dunnoe. XD Also, I want Tezuka's maids to back off...!!!!! Fuji is already taken!!!! x.X!!!

nyways thanks soooooooo much!!! =DDD

Date: 2008-03-23 09:32 am (UTC)
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Hahha, yeah it's finally here.. sorry for the late reply, I haven't been able to OL till today >.<

a date huh... maybe Tezuka teach Fuji to play tennis? hahah XD;;;
(Really, Tezuka is all about tennis XD;;)
and I think Fuji will soon learn to bathe himself, so the maids can back off XDD

thank you so much for reading and commenting ^____^

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Date: 2008-03-21 06:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ilovefuji-xx.livejournal.com
Yayy yayy yayy! An update!

ait, he wasn’t like… dead, was he? Because if yes, he was going to haunt Inui for life!

LMFAOO that was very funny. And the part where Tezuka thought that he was talking too much. LOL

Date: 2008-03-23 09:34 am (UTC)
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yes, yes, an update x33

hahah, thanks! I meant those scenes to be funny ^___^
thanks for reading *glomps*

Date: 2008-03-21 06:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] forbiden-past.livejournal.com
Yay, chapter 3! Akhirnya Fuji dan Tezuka ada dialognya^^;
Tezuka punya tunangan, jadi inget little mermaid asli.. tapi kalo yang ini happy ending kan? XD
*Menunggu chapter berikutnya*
LOL --> KiriAn, boleh juga..Tadinya khawatir dipasanginnya sama Yagyuu^^ pasti raja sama ratunya Yukimura ama Sanada ^o^

Soal nama, gw juga bingung >_< Susah..
Oya,ngomong2,bnr ga sih kita ga bisa lagi masukkin yaoi jadi interest?

Date: 2008-03-23 09:34 am (UTC)
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Heheh, yay! akhirnya chapter 3 kelar XDD
hooh, gw juga seneng akhirnya bisa masukin dialog antara mereka XD;; (walopun lebih mirip monolognya Tezuka XD;;)
yah, namanya juga parody, jadi emang b'dasarkan yg original ^^
soal happy ending.... moga2 aja begitu (amin!!) heheh... XD;;

and worry not, gw juga pecinta platinum pair kok, jadi ga bakalan dipasangin sama Yagyuu XD;;
dan betuuul sekali, mereka Raja sama Ratunya XDDD

hahah... iya nih, nama mereka susah ^^;;
wah, gatau ya? gara2 ganti pemilik itu yah? tapi klo ngepos fic atau art slash masih bisa kan?

Date: 2008-03-21 07:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] white-ashes07.livejournal.com
Wai!! Another chapter, yay~

Oh, and I want to second that request for MomoRyo... hehe.

Fuji trying to walk was so funny, and so was Tezuka wanting to help but not doing so in fear of Fuji's wrath.

And I wonder who the fiancee is. A she? Hmm. An OC? Oh well. I'll just be waiting for the next chapter. ^^

Date: 2008-03-23 09:35 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
yesss, another chappie x3

haha, okay then, I'll include MomoRyo next time, somewhere XDDD
Hahah, I enjoyed writing Fuji V.S. Gravity and balance ^___^ and glad u enjoyed it too!
and Tezuka could only watch with worry is cute ne x3

For the fiancee, yes, a 'she', and it's not an OC.. (I'm not good with OCs ^^;;)
I can't say more or it would spoil the fun x3
thanks for reading and glad u liked this ^______^

Date: 2008-03-21 09:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tacuma811.livejournal.com
That was a great chapter Ai! It's even better than I hoped! Tezuka is being so nice to Fuji! Carrying him (bridal-style ^_^) and catching him as he falls! So much love XD
And you even wrote about Ann! XD (Everytime I see her name I think about myself XD) I wonder what will happen with her!

Good luckt with you IELTS test and with learning for the test!! You can do it! ^_^

Maybe you can write more about Tezuka's fiancee. Maybe Fuji will meet the fiancee. Fuji Syuusuke vs Tezuka's fiancee XD Who will win Tezuka's heart?

I don't know any girly names for Gakuto or Jiroh, sorry.

Date: 2008-03-23 09:35 am (UTC)
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Waiiii~! glad that I've surpassed your expectation in this chappie x3 (I wrote this story for you, in the first place xD)
Tezuka is a softie deep down ne? ^^;
hahah, you and An share the same name after all XDDD
I'll write about An again next time, dun worry x3

and thanks! I'll need the luck! whew, I should be studying but I can't help getting online.. I've missed internet for only 2 days but I would die if I don't get online now >.<

And Fuji V.S the fiancee is part of the plot, of course, don't worry ;)

and that's okay... it's hard to find the girl ver. of their names ne ^^;
thanks for reading and glad u liked this ^__________^

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Stand Up and Walk!

Date: 2008-03-21 09:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nikkita-maldita.livejournal.com
I lurve this chappie. Tezuka is just a bit talkative, though.Who're Tezzy's parents? Is is it Ayana and Kuniharu?

And about Kiri-chan, it's kawaii, lurve you're Niou!Are the other rikkai regs of noble blood too? I wonder who the King and Queen? Is it Sanada and Yukimura?

Re: Stand Up and Walk!

Date: 2008-03-23 09:36 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Hahah, he needed to be a bit talkative with Fuji being mute ^^;;;
well, I haven't decided on his parents... could be Ayana or Kuniharu, or.... Ryuuzaki-sensei >_>
LoL...

I haven't decided of their roles too. maybe they're nobles in Rikkai Kingdom, maybe some of them part of the royal family as well. or maybe They're just Akaya's friends that work inthe palace,,, Iunno ^^;;;
and yes, Sanada and Yukimura are the King and Queen ^^
thanks for reading ^______^

Date: 2008-03-21 10:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vierblith-tefu.livejournal.com
Wooooooooooooooot!!!:3 And I <3 Eiji. He's just too cute~ Ahahaha. But nobles and royals are different. ^_^

More! More! More!

Date: 2008-03-23 09:36 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Whoops.... thanks for pointing that out >.< *hides in shame*
I'll fix it when I have a better connection ^^;;

thanks for reading! more will come up after my writer's block is gone >_>
hahah ^^;;;

Date: 2008-03-21 12:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reader-a.livejournal.com
lovely chapter 3 ^^
liked it a lot. especially the walking scenes. it made me smile.
Love Eiji, he's such a sweetie!
I so want the eating dinner with knife and fork scene ^^
and I wanna see Oishi in this one.

*offers freshly bakes cinnamon bun to your muse*
I hope the witersblock give in soon.

KiriAn ^^
that was random.
though I'm not to say anything with my pairlings!
good job! *hugs*

Date: 2008-03-23 09:37 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Thanks! I enjoyed writing the walking scenes, so I'm happy you liked the scenes ^___^
And Eiji is just too cute ne x3
hmm... dinner scene... I'll write it then xDDD
and Oishi will make his appearance in this one, we'll have a GP too XDD

*accepts the freshly baked cinnamon bun and feed her muse*
thanks! I hope it'll chase away the writer's block ^^

hahah, a bit random indeed, but I like KiriAn xD
thanks so much! *hugs back*

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Date: 2008-03-21 04:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] asara-rain.livejournal.com
Yaaaayyyy~ update! >__<~

Love this chapter so much!~
fighting-with-the-gravity Fuji is really cute, I can't even stop smiling while reading this chapter.
And Tezuka's fiancée, I wonder who might that be. Fuji-kun fight-o!!, don't give up, Tezuka is yours and alway yours!!!.
/what a crazy fangirl~ -_-''

Hope you good luck with your test! ^___^~
/waiting for the next chappie! ^o^

Date: 2008-03-23 09:38 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Eheheh, yes an update ^^
thanks! I'm glad u love this ^___^ *glomps*
I had fun writing Fuji fighting the gravity, glad u liked it ^^
About Tezuka's fiancee... just keep reading and you'll find out XDD
yes, fight, Fuji!! yay~!

thanks! I'll need the luck! and hope my writer's block will go away soon so I can write the next chappie x3

Date: 2008-03-22 02:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] enasniyllagel.livejournal.com
Yay an update. Fuji naked on a beach and Tezuka finding him too good to be true. Hmm with Fuji mute Tezuka has to do all the talking good luck! I kind of find Tezuka challenging to write because i'm always afraid of him saying to much. But I know you can do it. Good luck on your exam.

Date: 2008-03-23 09:39 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Hahah, yes I actually a bit scared I've made Tezuka talk too much... but Fuji's mute so he had to talk ^^;;
thanks! I hope I'll be good enough in writing the next chap(s) ^^
and thanks again, I'll need the luck for the test >.

Date: 2008-03-22 10:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ruji.livejournal.com
sorry i haven't reviewed till now! =X

anyway.. this is fun! can't wait to see more. i definitely didn't see the KiriAn coming. but its always fun to have Rikkai in the picture :D

I wanna see YuushiGakuto! XD And SanaYuki of course.
about the names... hmm.. maybe female!Gakuto can be Gakumi? :D I can't think of one for Jiroh now... but I'll keep thinking. I love naming things/people so I don't mind if you wanna poke me for some XDD

anyways, keep the great fun coming ^^

Date: 2008-03-23 09:39 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Hi, Ruji-san! ^^
no prob, I'm happy to have you review this chappie ^_____^

hahah, indeed. Rikkai is one of my fave team, I just had to put them in XD;;

YuushiGaku... I'll think about it ^^. as for SanaYuki, you'll see them, since they are the King and Queen for the Rikkai Empire XD;;
Gakumi... sounds nice, thanks ^^. and please tell me if you can think of something for girl!Jiroh's name ne? ^______^

thanks sooo much for reading and glad u liked this *hugs*

Date: 2008-03-22 10:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovefujitez.livejournal.com
Almost missed this one again! yikes...gomen! But I always look forward reading your creative work!

Fuji is surely resolute in making things work! Glad to see Fuji not totally dependent but I like seeing Tezuka watching from the side with concern.

hehehe Tezuka already got a glimpse of Fuji in his birthday suit....*blushing*

waiting for next chappie!

Date: 2008-03-23 09:40 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Hahah, but you didn't miss this one after all ne ^^ and thanks so much! your words boots my spirit up x3

Hahah, I don't see Fuji as a totally-dependent person ^^ and it was fun to write Tezuka just watching with concern ^^

hehehe Tezuka already got a glimpse of Fuji in his birthday suit....*blushing*
XD;;~

Thanks so much for reading and commenting ^______^ *hugs*

Date: 2008-03-22 10:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elanielyn.livejournal.com
And once again I'm the last one reading this...

Tezuka carrying Fuji was a nice thing ^^
I love the story. I'll be watching for the next chapter!

Date: 2008-03-23 09:41 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
No dear, you're not the last ^^ (and even if you were the last, I'd still be happy you're reading this ^^)

I've always wanted to write Tezuka carrying Fuji XD;; glad u liked it ^^
thanks for reading and commenting! please look forward to the next chappie ^_____^

Date: 2008-03-23 03:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xpeart.livejournal.com
hahahha
my imagination came true...
so fuji was naked after all XD XD
and yet tezuka took him bridal way to the bathrom??
haiyaaahh~~

well,, if my memory was right...
in the original story, the mermaid was a princess...
then would you also make fuji a prince merman??
i think that would make the story more interesting...

hahahhaha
although i'm in not a momoryo thing
but it would be interesting if tezuka had a brother brat like him...

waaii~~ are you making gakuto or jiroh a women??
ur not probably ernnn making them as tezuka's fiance, rite??
haiyahh~~
i curious with the misterious fiance ^^

Date: 2008-03-23 09:42 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Hahah, of course he was naked. he had been naked since the day he was born as a merman XD
but Tezuka gave the mantle to cover him up ne XD

well, it was the disney's version. but in the original story, I think the mermaid was not a princess. (if I remember correctly, that is)
I don't think Fuji is a prince though ^^;; I didn't plan it that way ^^;;

LoL... it is... Ryoma as Tezuka's li'l bro would be fun ne ^^

and yes, I'll make them (or one of them) a girl, but not as Tezuka's fiancee. that'd be too cracky XDD;;;
you'll find out who the fiancee is soon enough, I think XD
thanks for reading ^____^

Date: 2008-03-23 03:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iceshade.livejournal.com
omfg, I love this chappie so much that I just keep reading and rereading it and rerereading it. I have never ever read a little mermaid fanfiction that touches upon the fact that the mermaid/man, never having been human or on land, should not be able to walk. and even though I knew about it happening from the preview in the previous chapter tezuka carrying fuji bridal style was absolute win. I cannot wait to see the next part and I'm sorry I haven't commented sooner
kirihara/an <-- so much crack! I love it, hilarious. and as for pairings, you must put in oishi and have some golden pair love because with them it's practically canon. also, would you have an issue with platinum pair? yagyuu or niou seme, I don't care...
I think the fiancee is sakuno...

Date: 2008-03-23 09:43 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Waiii~ I'm happy this chappie made you want to keep rereading this x3
And yes, I thought that having never been human, Fuji should've never knew how to walk before, and he had to learn how to do it ne ^^
beside, I thought that'd make the story more interesting to have Fuji fighting againts gravity ^^;; and glad u liked that bridal-style carrying scene ^^
and no prob! I accept comments at any time since I love getting them ^^;

Eheheh... glad u liked the KiriAn too x3
and we will have Oishi here... we'll have GP and SP love as you requested before ^^
and I haven't decide about Platinum Pair. I may have them implied but I don't know if they will be a pairing in the end. (though I DO love Platinum pair too x3)
about the fiancee... I can only say that it's not Sakuno... hahah... ^^
Sakuno already has her own role here ^^

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Date: 2008-03-23 03:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] moehoshi.livejournal.com
Yes, I'm late (again) but I have to comment! XD

I've been reading this again and again 'cause this chapter is really good. Plus, it includes 2 of my favorite pairings! So much love. <3 *fangirls*

I really can't wait the next chappies. Tezuka's 'fiancee' is FTW! *evil grin* Oh, I love [livejournal.com profile] ruji-san's suggestion on Gakuto's name (Gakumi). It's cute! X3

*flails* Wonderful job, as always, a1y-chan!(*'ω'*)ゞ *glomps*

Date: 2008-03-23 05:46 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Nyaaa~ glad to have your comment here too XD

waiii~ I'm glad this made you want to keep rereading ^___^
thanks! and thanks for all your help too x3

Eheheh... just wait for the next chappie ne? I'll be asking for your help again, please bear with me XD
and yes, Tezuka's fiancee is FTW xDDD

I think I'kk use her suggestion ^^ Gakumi sounds nice x3

thanks!! hope I can satisfy you (and everyone) with the next chappie x3
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Date: 2008-03-23 06:26 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
LoL, another KiriAn fan xD *glomps*
Okay let's get married ♥♥♥♥♥
XDDD

Thanks! glad you enjoyed this chapter too x3
and Eiji is indeed too cute for words *nods*
I love Rikkai too but unfortunately Sanada is the king and Yukimura is the Queen. I decided on that not only for their physical appearances but also coz it's harder to convert Sanada's name into a female's name XD;;



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Date: 2008-03-24 05:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dhorz.livejournal.com
sjkldghlas sorry...just had to smash... I completely love the way you wrote Fuji's thoughts here.

ROFL I loved that bit when Fuji wondered about his anatomy. *squeeing crazily* And you put Eiji in the story!

Why does Tezuka have a fiancee aaah *wail* But I love him for being so patient with Fuji.

KiriAn? Bad Akaya! XD Well, do continue with the side story. Waaah...I wail for my KamioAnMomo XD

I'm patiently waiting for the update. :D

Date: 2008-03-24 06:05 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
first of all: yaaay~~~ your comment is the 20th!!! *hugs and kisses you*

Hahah, I loved that bit too, I was grinning like mad while typing it down XDDD

Tezuka just has to have a fiancee... hahah.. if not, the story wouldn't be interesting.. and I assure you that he has a very 'interesting' fiancee... *evil grin*

And yes, I will put more KiriAn later, though maybe not in every chapters ^^

hope my block will go soon so I can write the next chappie x3

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Date: 2008-03-28 03:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vicky-coow.livejournal.com
Thanks for an update...i'll waiting the next chapter too.
i really love the brave heart of fuji.Step and Walk!!!
"Water was much more convenient for him. But hell, he was a tensai! He should be able to do it soon, right?"...LoL...

for side story...keep writing for me please.
i like it too...wanna know what's Akaya doing to An?

Date: 2008-03-28 05:00 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
heheh.. thanks! I'm glad u liked it x3

as for sidestories, they might not in every chapters but I will write another sidestory for KiriAn ^^

Date: 2008-04-29 02:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thallein.livejournal.com
"Tezuka sighed before he finally walked towards Fuji, picked him up, and carried him, bridal-style."
--*Squee* my tezukafuji fangirl is dancing with joy XDDD

kikumaru is so cute! X33

but the ending! fiance?? noo >.> *goes to read the next chapt*

Date: 2008-04-30 05:18 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] a1y-puff.livejournal.com
Heheh, thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it x3

and yes, a fiancee... I hope you'll like her when she appears in chap 5 *grins*

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