http://minutie.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] minutie.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] a1y_puff 2007-12-14 06:29 am (UTC)

That was a great opening chapter. Apart from the slight grammatical mistakes from time to time, the story was really interesting! I like the aspect of the silent communication showing their close bond.

The last few lines about Tezuka's stares seem to bring in an introduction to Tezuka's feelings, which is great.

Good job, and update soon! :D

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